Monday, February 18, 2008

Hiya...Long time no c

Hi so as you can probably tell by the horrid caliber of this I wrote it really late at nite...I should have been asleep for like two hours...=_= anyways here is a piece of my writing...



From underneath the branch came a soft plaintive cooing. A large almost white hawk desperately pulled at the branch. When removed the source of the cooing became evident, underneath it was a snow-white hawk,

"Mother!" cried the hawk staring at her mangled form

"Oh No! Mom, No!" a younger black hawk flew down from the stump of the branch

The first hawk was standing over his mother, "Izak what were you thinking? It's ma-matricide."

I-I d-don't-t kn-now it-it's n-not m-my fault." Both young hawks were sobbing.



Hehe like i said its horrible...Well im not a very good writer...I sorta want to extend this....oh well...>_<

1 comment:

Anuoki said...

I like it, but your missing a few commas and I think you should give the second "snow white hawk" another color.

:) :) :) good work